Friends Forever. Turned into blossoming infatuation. Forever couple. Is it love? Maybe not yet..
Distance, misunderstandings, arguments, fights and lies. A couple broken before love could happen. Friends again. Happy for each other’s happiness.
He falls for someone again. She is happy with someone else again. They are happy in their own worlds. What could be, is a question and a doubt that will forever remain unexplored. A chance meeting, a stolen kiss. Nothing more, back to their happy worlds.
Kids turn into adults. Turn of maturity. Time for permanency. He is thinking of marrying his girl, she is still looking for love, although just happy with someone else.
A sudden encounter. It tears her up that his intense feelings for her are now for someone else. It tears him up that she was never this happy with him. A stolen night.
A few days, stolen from the world. Guilt. Knowledge that this could work. All it needs is effort.
But its too late now. Back into the worlds they built. The doubt, the question will forever remain incomplete. Because just a few days are not enough. They were forever friends. The forever part had magnanimous implications. Torn souls, forced into being friends.
Not happy as more than that, unhappy at less than that.
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could be a 4-part 3hr-each YC series!
p.s.: any point tried to be made?
Leaves me speechless. Nicely n carefully worded n indeed is true…
Ten years ago I’d have sighed and said “Star-crossed lovers”. Now I just think that we complicate our own lives.
You coping up, love?
Satish – NO YC here!! Its a random “if” scenario which became a story..
Prasoon – Thanks!!
Idea – You are back!! *Jiggety jig* I dont think they are star crossed lovers, just very real people, with real conflicts. And yes, we always always complicate our lives, in the effort to entertain or simplify it in the first place!!
??! :O okkkk..
I think you would have written much better than this. I felt a need of proper nouns in your sentences. May it be in your mind and may this be your style to not to write it. I personally feel when one writes a story…he/she should not leave all the questions unanswered, which is there in it. So I will say…its not unfinished but an empty story.
I hope you will consider this positively.
Cheers! Keep it up.
Neha – Of course I’ll take it positively. Any comment made to enhance my writing in any way is MOST welcome. About the story, I hardly use proper nouns and names in my short stories. For some reason, I feel like that style defines my writing. I do understand that for the reader, it might be a little difficult to comprehend.
And about the questions left unanswered, In some stories, I let the creative minds of the readers run. Let them decide which way it ends, in different ways it could end, and different stories that would arise with those ends.
Here, this is an unfinished story. So there is no end. Its more like the story of two lives, observed in passing.. but with detail.. get my drift?